Book -Web Copy That Sells

Do you know the secrets behind writing web copy that sells thousands of dollars of product every week?

Would you like to increase your web related income by an order of magnitude?

Of course you would.

Web copy that sells – the Revolutionary formula for creating killer copy by Maria Veloso. claims to help everyone write irresistible copy that compels people to  buy whatever you’re selling on the web. Instead it describes various sleazy, deceptive & underhanded methods for the hard sell.

A large portion of this book is devoted to e-mail marketing which very few people use today. (Unless, of course,  they’re retired princes from Nigeria)  So the information in these chapters is nothing more than fill. There are a  few people for whom the book really is worthwhile – if you are doing legitimate mass email marketing, or if you are marketing an eBook about marketing or other money making products, then yes, Veloso may help you sell more.  But for all her examples, she gives no examples of how to increase the sales of the widgets most of us might want to sell on the web.  Also, if your product doesn’t cost $100 – $1000 then she does even less to help you.

So why spend time with this book? The book IS worth reading, precisely because it exposes in clear language, the psychological tricks that copy writers use to get you to buy products you otherwise wouldn’t consider.

How to become a great web copywriter in five hours or less

Here’s the big “secret’ she reveals:

find a good piece of copy [aka plagiarism!]

 write it out by hand two or three times right now

then write it  two or three times over the next week (this will take roughly 5 hours).

Now you’re a ‘brilliant copywriter’ because, she says, you will ” start internalizing the wording, the phraseology, the riveting rhythm, even the mindset of the person who wrote the copy. Your brain assimilates it, and you practically step into the mind of the writer. This is by far the best modeling exercise I found for accelerating Web copywriting skills.” I was underwhelmed.

Trifecta Neuro affective principle

This principle ‘eliminates the need for you to make decisions’ about which points your sales proposition to include or exclude because the principal triggers are predetermined for you — proper inflammation of the sensible virtually guarantees successful results from the use of the formula and also dramatically shortens the need for superfluous words and long scrolling copy

the principal turns out to be:

  • to support, prove, and defend their respective propositions (redefinition)
  • to destroy the opponent’s arguments ( resistance )
  • to appeal to the audience’s emotions (resonance)

In fact this principle is nothing more than the idea of repeating things in threes and explaining things in multiple ways.    She  spends many pages making it seemed more complex than this but that’s what it boils down to


Using psychology to motivate prospects to become purchasers

Halfway through the book Veloso presents several chapters of material that actually make this book worth purchasing. She’s describing how to overcome your buyer’s resistance but in fact gives useful information on how we as consumers can resist some of these hard and soft sells. For example ” in selling a product or service, always tell your readers why they need to do what you’re asking. Something as simple as ‘ you must act now because this offer expires on December 31, after which we can no longer accept orders’  is sufficient. ”

she talks about the Zeigarnik effect, named after a Russian psychologist who showed that people have a tendency to remember things that are unfinished or incomplete. For example in one experiment, waiters could descrinbe orders that are already served, but could tell you exactly what the orders were that were yet to be served.  it’s a state of mental tension and imbalance caused by  uncompleted tasks.

Many of her techniques seem to take advantage or actually create this mental tension and unbalancing — such as creating cognitive dissonance in your readers/buyers. She also recommends adhering to  a linear path so that buyer remains along the path that you have created for her . This means no distractions ” if you’re ever tempted to include advertising banners on your website, or Google AdSense ads, or reciprocal links with other websites, or links to other unrelated pages in your website that don’t contribute to the sales process, remember that you are violating the linear path concept allowing the Zeigarnik effect to kick in.”  Of course this also eliminates many of the other techniques that might also be useful in increasing sales on your website. The website and corresponding web copy that she envisions has one purpose only and that is to drive buyers to the selling fields where the final sale is made. If you are selling products that rely on manipulation and heat of the moment decisions [think infomercials] then her techniques may be useful. But if you are trying to both give information, entertainment, and sell, her information will be of little value.

She really likes to include jargon like neurolinguistic programming and other neologisms to represent simple psychological manipulation. For example, using embedded commands to push your reader  where you want them to go. For example the sentence “‘I wonder how quickly you are going to buy this product’ seems harmless and the reader might consciously take it as a hypothetical comment. Notice the embedded commands, it’s quite an hypnotic effect: you are going to buy this product.    As you read this book you realize that the book itself has been organized and written using exactly these methods to blindside the reader and make them accept concepts and actions that they would otherwise challenge.. It’s filled with embedded commands,  bullet lists,  emotional triggers and other method she describes in the art of changing your prospects’ minds.

Veloso  includes many examples of successful copywriting, and guides you step by step in creating your very own web copy.  Unfortunately, most of her examples are of high cost products that are already guaranteed to get high readership and response, or of products that most of us should be embarrassed to be associated with.  Before presenting these examples which range from  manipulative to downright sleazy she always uses a disclaimer saying use your powers only for good.  There’s the  one-day seminar in Chicago introducing a breakthrough weight loss program this person developed to lose 25 pounds in less than two weeks and keep the weight off. It turns out the miracle is in fact one nutrient that ” the government won’t allow him to sell” but that this discovery is so “powerful, safe, and effective that it makes people lose the unwanted pounds so fast that they need a  new wardrobe just a few weeks after starting the program.”  For some reason the only way this information could be conveyed is in a one day 12 hours seminar that cost $1000 However for those who couldn’t attend the live seminar reservations were allowed to buy audio CDs of the seminar for $250

Supposedly, on the basis of this e-mail ‘hundreds’ of people forked over a thousand dollars to attend this seminar.  None of the buyers asked why a simple ‘nutrient’ solution to weight loss would require a 12 hours seminar as the only means of disclosure when at the same time audio’s were being sold with exactly the same information. Obviously this information could easily have been put in book form and presented for less than $100.  But the purpose of the techniques being recommended here was to get people to buy something they would not buy if they thought it through rationally.

  Do you really want to be writing web copy for these purposes?

Critical Thinking

Glendower:   I can call spirits from the vasty deep.
Hotspur:        Why, so can I, or so can any man 
                              But will they come when you do call for them?

                                                         –Henry IV, Part 1

Science evolves, Faith is static

As science evolves it finds better and better ways to describe the real world. On the other hand, superstition and pseudoscience continue to muddle the waters. Science is the rational, incremental pursuit of knowledge. The only real way to progress is to design and conduct studies, report the results in peer reviewed journals and proceed to the next question. Problems come in interpreting the results, of course, and journalists have a responsibility to fairly represent the studies’ conclusions – often they’re taken out of context or oversimplified

Unfortunately, as the American public becomes less scientifically literate  more people can be misled [not helped any by those who think creationism is a science]. Basic statistics should be a part of everyone’s education, probably more important for people than geometry or trig or calculus. Critical thinking is required if we’re to have an informed populace. And it matters because anyone can vote, serve on a jury, etc, no matter how ignorant [ie, lacking in facts, not stupid]. The solution is not to narrow the franchise but rather to raise the level scientific knowledge and other important information in everyone’s daily life. This involves not only information but also how we organize that information.

Critical thinking gives us the tools to evaluate information and it’s a process that can easily be learned. In a way pseudoscience and beliefs in paranormal are some of the easiest fallacies to debunk. At first many of these claims appear to be invulnerable, but once you learn which questions to ask these claims are easy to deny. I first started reading the Skeptical Inquirer when Martin Gardner talked about it in his column in Scientific American in the 1980s. By investigating claims of the paranormal using scientific methods it’s easily shown that basic scientific methods deny these extraordinary claims.

Most of these creationist canards are examples of logical fallacies, so studying them can help understand and expose fallacies in other fields, especially given the ‘alternate facts’ approach of the Trump presidency

More about Creationist arguments

Creation Myths

For example the book of Genesis can’t stand up to a rational, scientific reading – it’s actually a conflation of at least 2 earlier creation myths and the order of creation is different in each story this – in one place it says man was created after the animals, in another that animals were created first – it also says light was created before the sun which is the source of our light. These errors show problems in using an ancient text to describe the modern world.

By allowing the religious to define atheism many thinkers have been forced on the defensive. Atheism is not firm knowledge that there is no God, for who can prove a negative? Rather atheism is merely the acknowledgment that we find no evidence FOR the existence of any god. Some would call this agnosticism but there’s really no difference. It’s not an easy or comforting conclusion, but, it means we need to seek a moral basis somewhere other than “do this or you’ll go to hell!”

Skeptic Magazine and Free Inquiry are other sources for developing your critical thinking skills.
Science is under attack from many quarters these days. These books give some excellent introductions and explanations of some of the more common misconceptions and misguided attempts.


“The distaste for” progress” and machine-civilization which is so common among sensitive people is only defensible as an attitude of mind. ” George Orwell

Here are several books that focus on specific areas of irrational thinking and also show that the right has no monopoly on faulty thinking. These books give some excellent introductions and explanations of some of the more common misconceptions and misguided attempts.The Secret Origins of the Bible Tim Callahan

Proof of Creation

The Evolution of God

Goddess Unmasked: The Rise of Neopagan Feminist Spirituality
Quite a mouthful of a title, but an excellent book debunking ‘Goddess spirituality’s fraudulent promises of a newage of peace and justice.   Davis “exposes the complete want of archaeological evidence for this claim, revealing the ovement’s nineteenth century roots in radical Romanticism” (from the jacket)
Higher Superstition : The Academic Left  and Its Quarrels with Science.. A thorough examination of the results of applying a confused literary philosophy to science.   Covers postmodernism, feminism, radical environmentalism, multiculturalism and AIDS activism — each of these areas has tremendous strengths, but the deconstructionist approach (aka political correctness) often leads to absurd positions.  None of these discussions can be dismissed with soundbites, and this book is heavy going in places, but essential for anyone trying to work or think within modern science and academia. cover

Life’s Dominion – Ronald Dworkin  – arguments  on deciding the taking of life – abortion, euthanasia, capital punishment
Heisenberg’s War – scientists’s responsibilities during war

Related work:

One of the more absurd and inane ideas is that of intelligent design as an alternative to evolution.  ID has no scientific backing – there’s no actual research supporting it, there’s no peer reviewed articles [as Michael Behe one of its chief proponents admitted under oath in the2005 trial in Dover PA. ]  So it’s sad to see Northwest Great Books Institute  include Behe’s  Darwin’s Black Box as one of its selection for their annual meeting in Bellingham WA.